What are the advantages and disadvantages of ever-increasing use of technology
Nowadays
smartphones, computers, laptops, and other achievements of technology are
widely used by people. We may even consider them to be an essential part of our
life, which is highly “addicted” to them. But at the same time, the high using
of them is leading to some arguments among people whether it is good or bad. So
let’s review advantages and disadvantages of ever-increasing use of technology through
three aspects: the effect on children, human’s socialization, and our life in
general.
It’s strongly believed that technology has
a great influence on children; unfortunately, it’s not only positive, but also
negative. From one point of view, gadgets help young generation to develop their
mental skill, teach them to think widely, and to be broad-minded. Now kids seem
to be smarter in using of technique than adults. But on the other hand, children
became really addicted to smartphones and other gadgets. They spend the most of
their time in front of the screens and follow passive way of live. For example,
a friend of mine has a little brother. He is an enough smart boy who
understands difficult computer programs and wants to be a programmer. But at
the same time, he prefers a smartphone to walking with friends or playing
active games. And this leads to a quarrel between him and his parents.
Another controversial point is about human’s
socialization. According to the article from “Forbes” about the person’s loneliness,
in the modern world many people, while having a huge number of virtual friends,
don’t have real soulmates who may give them a helping hand in some
difficulties. Does it mean that technology doesn’t help people to make friends?
Certainly, no. Internet became a way of
meeting new people who share your interests and hobbies. It allows you to have
a friend from another part of the world. Moreover, some persons find their love
with the help of Internet.
And of course, technology has a great
influence on our style of life. But can we say that it is always pleasant
changes? In general, it makes our lives easier. You may make a delicious cup of
coffee at home just with the help of a coffee machine. You may keep in touch
with your distant friends and relatives. You may clean your house without any forces,
because you have a robot vacuum cleaner! Almost every thing can be done by
technique. But is it always advantageous? At this time many people are losing
their job, because their work is done by robots. For instance, one my acquaintance
was fired, because now some new electronic programs can do his job. For free.
That’s why his skills are not required any more.
To sum it up, all changes in our life have
positive and negative results; so as ever-increasing use of technology has. It’s
pretty clear that technology is developing with an absolutely high speed and we
can’t do anything against it. An only thing we can do is to send it to the
right stream.
The article from “Forbes”: https://www.forbes.com/sites/womensmedia/2012/05/24/text-or-talk-is-technology-making-you-lonely/#4410acd32a7b


Hi, Julia. I must admit your essay is very grasping. I spent a really enjoyable time reading it. But I have found some mistakes which, I believe, you made not on purpose, but by accident:
ОтветитьУдалить1) I would change "high using" to "frequent using"
2) But at the same time, the high using of them is leading to some arguments among people whether it is good or bad. I would change "it" in the last part of the sentence to "they are" as you are speaking about argumentS
3) It is advisable to use full, not contracted, forms in essays. Be careful with it!
4) he prefers a smartphone to walking with friends or playing active games. It is not a parallel structure. I think it is better to write "...he prefers using a smartphone to walking with..." or he prefers a smartphone to a walk with his friends or active games.
Yours,
Polina
Hello, Polina! Thank you very much for your comment:)
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ОтветитьУдалитьHello,
Thanks for sharing your essay draft.
You 've managed to single out a number of important points associated with the impact of technology on people' s lives
*the high using of them: WExp
*Internet became (Gr: res-t) a way of meeting + article use
*some persons: WF
teach them to think
*clean your house without any *forces (WW) and to be broad-minded
can we say that *it is (WNum) is always *pleasant (WW)
changes: it is not about being pleasant but useful & effective
technology is developing *with (prep) an absolutely high speed
An (art) only thing we can do is to...
Good morning, Natalia Yurievna. Thank you a lot for your comment.
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